The Crocodile
I
entered the dark zoo, and all of a sudden a CROCODILE was chasing me! I
turned back to see if it was still there but I noticed that the crocodile’s
eyes were WIDE and ORANGE. Right then I bumped into a pole and COLLAPSED. I was on my knees, moving away from the
reptile, when something pulled me back.
It was my friend Joe.
“ I knew you would be here,” said Joe.
We
waited for a minute and then as we were about to leave the crocodile popped out
of nowhere. Within a second we
sprinted out of the zoo!
nice story, but I think you should have a comma after right. on the third sentence.
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