The door
“Emily finish your work and then you can go home,” said Mrs.G. Emily was staying after school to finish her work. It was late in the afternoon. First she helped out the teachers with some work and then she had to finish her homework which was not done. Emily’s school was quite old. She is in grade 7. “Mrs.G, I’m done my work. Can I go now?”Mrs.G replied, “You may go now, but next time finish your homework.” Emily walked out of the classroom and was heading towards the office. She heard a strange noise coming from a room. Right then the lock clicked and...
My only advice would be instead of "Emily is staying after school" you should put "Emily was staying after school" .
ReplyDeleteSame with "Emily is in grade seven" change it to was but,that's just my opinion.
It's your story.
after you wrote "replied Mrs. G" you are missing a comma but other then that amazing story
ReplyDeleteAwesome story just when you say then you could go home, it should say then you can go home
ReplyDeleteHi awesome story. I think instead of saying this.
ReplyDelete(First she helped out the teachers with some work and then she had to finish her homework that was not done.)
(say which was not done.)
good story 123
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